A ‘good essay guide’ for social psychology undergraduates


Rules are for fools and the guidance of the wise

Preliminaries

Preface

What you see below is a draft version that I have been intending for over a year to revise. It is becoming increasingly clear that revision is not likely to happen today or tomorrow. Please forgive any roughness in this document, especially with respect to repetition and omission. I intend to revise the document properly one day, but we all know where good intentions tend to lead. Nevertheless, it may be worth your while revisiting this page every so often, just in case I have managed to get around to completing (or, more likely, updating) the document. Cheers.
 

Introduction

This guide is provided in response to requests from some social psychology students at the University of Sussex. The guide attempts to supplement the feedback that students get on individual essays by providing some indicators of where marks are typically lost and won when tutors mark undergraduate social psychology essays.
 

In a nutshell

Marks tend to positively correlate with the extent to which an essay provides a (i) well-presented, (ii) justified, (iii) relevant, (iv) argument. Each of these essential components will be discussed below (but not in this order).
 

Relevance

Relevance of the essay to the task set by the title

To get good grades, your essay has to provide whatever is demanded by the essay title. Look carefully at the title. What is it asking for? If it is potentially ambiguous, what are various things it could be asking for? Now look carefully at each word in the title. How would the demands of the essay change if each word was missing or replaced by some other word? Ask yourself about the relative advantages and disadvantages of focusing in detail on an aspect of the task set rather than attempting a superficial treatment of the whole thing. Now choose which of the possible interpretations (or aspects) of the essay title you are going to address. In the introduction to your essay, explicitly state how you are interpreting the demands of the title and justify your interpretation (and any restrictions you have set). At the end of your essay, make explicit how your essay has satisfied the demands of the essay title as you have interpreted it.

The best essays will: acknowledge any ambiguities in the essay title; concern themselves with important qualifying terms in the title (e.g., social behaviour); state explicitly the task that will be undertaken in the essay (i.e. of those possible within the rubric of the title); justify the legitimacy of the task selected (i.e. relative to others that could be attempted within the rubric set by the title); and state explicitly how the task undertaken is relevant to the essay title. They will then do what they have told the reader they will do.
 

Relevance of the essay content to the task attempted

To get good grades, your essay has to stay maximally focused on the task in hand. Once you have written your essay, check that every part of it is relevant to the task in hand. For every paragraph (or other unit of your choice) ask yourself, "What does this contribute to my essay?" An analogy may help illustrate the point I am trying to convey. Think of your essay as a map. The point explored in the section just above concerned making sure that the route your essay took got you to the right destination. The point in this section concerns making sure you take the most appropriate route there. The most appropriate route is usually the shortest possible within other constraints you have to meet. The question you are asking yourself now then is, "Does this section of my essay represent a diversion?" If it does, ask yourself first whether it is in your interests to take such a diversion. Then ask yourself whether the resources used in making the diversion (e.g. number of words) might be better used in another way. Be especially wary of 'context'/'background information', anecdotes, analogies, and arguments you have made of which you are particularly fond.

The best essays will contain only material relevant to the stated task (see above). Where the relevance of material to that task is potentially not clear to the reader, it will be made explicit.
 
 

Justification

Every point you make within your essay needs to be justified. To continue with my analogy, you need to convince the reader both that you have chosen a legitimate destination and that you have provided compelling reasons to take the route you suggest. As has already been indicated, you need to justify your interpretation of the essay title and your proposed method of meeting the demands set by that interpretation. You also need to justify inclusion of all the material within your essay - and often also exclusion of other material that the reader might think should be there. Most importantly, you need to justify each and every claim you make within your essay. When you have finished your essay, read through it and identify every claim you have made and every persuasive strategy you have used. For each one ask yourself, "Have I provided the best possible (any?) justification for this claim/strategy?"

Justification takes two main forms within undergraduate social psychology essays, referential and rational. Referential justification occurs when claims are justified by citing empirical studies or other sources (e.g. theories, news reports, quotes) that are consistent with the claim made. As far as possible, referential evidence should be used to provide evidence for the accuracy or legitimacy of every claim you make within an essay. This serves several purposes. First, it provides you with some security that there is some reason to make the claim you do. Secondly, it allows you to acknowledge when you are relying on someone else's evidence or ideas, thus avoiding accusations of plagiarism. Thirdly, you are suggesting (and ideally demonstrating) a familiarity with and an ability to effectively use the existing relevant literature. Finally, you are providing the reader with information about where to go to check out the validity of the claims you make. This is both good practice and more likely to persuade the reader of the legitimacy of your claim.

Rational justification occurs when 'reason' is appealed to justify an action or claim. Logic is good for this. This is not the place for a logic course, but I strongly recommend that you become familiar with the following concepts (and their opposites): consistency, entailment, preclusion, necessity, and sufficiency. Your ability to analyse and argue (see below) social psychological material will in large part be determined by your competence to employ concepts such as these. Less formally, rational justification is also possible by claiming similarities and differences between things (in order to draw conclusions on the basis of such comparisons).

Referential and rational justification are not entirely independent. For example, one may justify something by claiming a need for it on the basis of a gap in the relevant existing literature.

It is sometimes possible to indicate justification implicitly. Nevertheless, I recommend doing so explicitly wherever possible.

The best essays leave nothing unjustified. They justify their interpretation of the essay title and their approach to addressing the issues raised. They justify the relevance of all material included and they justify the exclusion of seemingly important material they exclude. They justify each and every discrete claim made and they justify the legitimacy of conclusions drawn from those lower-level claims. Finally, they justify the overall argument of the essay and the relevance of that argument to the essay title.
 
 

Argument

Constructing an argument

Undergraduate academic development might reasonably be measured by the proportion of analysis (argument) to exposition (description) within essays. One thing you are expected to do at university is gather information. Another is learn how to analyse such information. A third is how to communicate both the information and your analysis of it. At the start of your undergraduate degree your essays are likely to be primarily focused on exposition, letting the tutor know that you have learned and are able to competently communicate key theories and studies. At that stage, a relatively high grade will be possible with 'little more' than good exposition (perhaps spiced up with some summation or synthesis). At the end of your undergraduate degree (and ideally before then) your tutors would ideally like to be able to assume that you are familiar with and able to competently communicate key material. At that stage, exposition alone is much less likely to result in a good grade, no matter how well it is done. As you approach finals, you will need to demonstrate that you can 'interrogate' and use information, not just gather and report it.

Essay titles either obviously or subtly invite argument. If they seem not to and you want good grades, interpret them as if they did. Often this may be done by simply (mentally) inserting the word "critically" in an appropriate place (e.g. "[Critically] Compare..."; "[Critically] Describe..."). Other strategies include (i) mentally inserting other phrases, such as "To what extent...", and (ii) interrogating assumptions made or implied within the title. As already mentioned, as you advance through university it will be increasingly assumed that you are familiar with the major theories, studies and findings within social psychology. Progressively, then, essay grades become determined by the relative ability of students to use that commonly available information to persuasively present an argument (with persuasiveness being largely dictated by presentation, justification, and relevance). This requires not just the parroting back of 'facts', however eloquently this is done. Instead, you need to establish what the relevant facts are and how they may be combined to reach some conclusion that addresses the issue(s) raised by the essay question. At its best, exposition (especially within the later stages of the undergraduate degree) occurs only in the service of making or justifying a point within an argument.
 

Making an argument for yourself

One thing you definitely want to avoid when writing undergraduate essays is accusations of plagiarism. Such accusations are easily avoided if you (i) use accepted conventions to indicate both direct and indirect quotation, and (ii) scrupulously cite sources of information and ideas that come from sources that you draw upon.

Much harder than avoiding plagiarism is being creative. Students ask, "How can I come up with new ideas about (let alone new answers for) these problems that have taxed numerous of the world's greatest thinkers for a very long time?" The answer is that you don't have to. You can be creative by evaluating the ideas these others have had. Just because somebody clever has said something, this does not give that statement overwhelming authority. Nor does the fact that it has been said by someone who has conducted 25 years of intensive empirical investigation into the matter. For almost every claim there is an contrary or inconsistent claim made by someone equally impressive (sometimes the same person!). Your job is to persuade the reader that there is, or is not, a reason to favour one view over another. You do this in exactly the same way that your tutor will read your essay, i.e., by evaluating the justification for and ramifications of all relevant claims made. Just as you would fail to be impressed by a commentator who merely paraphrased someone else when claiming to present a novel argument, so too will your tutor’s positive impression of your essay increase to the extent that you have avoided merely summarising or rephrasing the thoughts of others (especially from secondary texts on the essential reading list).
 
 

Presentation

Looks matter

Whatever the truth of the matter, it is a widespread belief among markers that fairly reliable inferences may be made about the quality of the content of an essay on the basis of the quality of the essay's presentation. It is therefore in your interest to make your essay as presentable as possible.
 

Questions of style

It is your responsibility to make sure you know what requirements your essay must conform to. One fairly universal one is that all work submitted at university should be word-processed. In addition, double spacing and wide margins have two benefits. First, they look good to tutors, disposing them well towards both the essay and its author. Secondly, they allow the tutor the opportunity to write relatively full and clear comments on your essay.

There will also be some more or less local requirements you will need to take account of. In social psychology at Sussex, for example, we expect all citation and referencing to accord with ‘APA-style’. (In case you don’t yet know, APA is an acronym for the American Psychological Association. Most of the top journals in social psychology, e.g., the Journal of Personality and Social Psychology, are written in APA style, so check how things are done there if in doubt. There are also plenty of APA style guides available, especially on the world wide web – see links from my web page). Again, it is your responsibility, and in your interest, to find out what local requirements apply and conform to them or risk adverse consequences.

Readers of your essay will clearly have many expectations concerning style. To the extent that you deviate from such expectations, you risk losing percentage points for your essay in two ways. First, by the mere fact of demonstrating a lack of ability to learn and adopt conventions considered appropriate. Secondly, to the extent that the reader notices the form of your essay (i.e., because of the deviations from expectations), they are likely to be distracted from its content - which is where the good marks potentially come from.

Beyond conventional concerns, the other important aspect of style boils down to the way you write. Many undergraduates (and many others) try very hard to adopt an ‘academic style’ in their writing and succeed only in producing impenetrable, sprawling and dull tracts of pseudo-psychology. Others go too far the other way in an attempt to make their writing lively and fun (and to show their refusal to be bound by restrictive conventions), ending up coming across as arrogant, flippant, or plain silly. In large part, learning an appropriate style is a matter of trial and error, although vicarious learning (i.e. learning from others’ mistakes, and the lack of them) is very useful. As a broad rule (and no more is appropriate here), make everything as clear and concise as you possibly can, from overall arguments down to single words. Thus, avoid jokes, barely relevant anecdotes, jargon, needlessly ‘intellectual’ vocabulary, and (do as I say, not as I do), overly long – and excessively punctuated - sentences. (Thank you to those who have pointed out that the previous sentence is overly long and excessively punctuated. Such feedback is confirmation that one should be very wary of attempting humour when writing in academic settings.) Two tips. First, prior to writing, say aloud (ideally to someone else, if need be to yourself) the point you intend to make, as though explaining it to an interested and intelligent person who knows nothing of the area. Then write the point down as simply as possible. Second, once you have finished writing, read your essay aloud (or, better yet, get someone else to): where you falter, revise or re-write.
 

Structure

An essential component of presentation is the essay structure. This is so important, I dedicate almost a whole section to it, immediately below.
 

Breaking it down

Before you ‘start’ (and after you ‘finish’)

See under ‘feedback’ below.
 

Choosing a title

Writing an essay requires sustained interest. Choose a title that poses a question that you are interested in, either because you want to find out an answer to your own satisfaction (i.e., find out what you think) or because you want to develop the best case you can for arguing one or other side of an argument that presents an answer to the question.

A good essay will display critical skills, so make sure you choose titles that allow you to do more than describe. Many titles that might appear to ask for descriptions should - if at all possible - be read as invitations to argue something.
 

The Introduction

Make every word count: avoid journalistic 'context' or 'background'. Get straight on with the job at hand. This is making explicit what the job in hand is. Titles are often ambiguous and may additionally or alternatively invite answers that are potentially too long, too complex, or otherwise inappropriate within the parameters set (e.g. word-length). As long as your essay is relevant to the title and covers as much as could be expected within applicable limits, you will do well. You do not have to consider every possible nuance and explore all potentially relevant avenues. What you do have to do is state your understanding of the title and legitimise your attempted response to it. [Hint: Is it possible that the examiner 'intended' a certain understanding of the title? Hint: How do key words in the essay title affect the title's meaning?]

The other crucially important aspect of the introduction is its end. Here you should explicitly report what you will argue and what title-relevant conclusion this will lead you to reach. It is greatly in your interest to provide this guide for the reader. It will allow them to see (or if necessary infer) the relevance of all that follows. It will help you make sure that everything that follows is relevant. And it will imply a structure to the essay that goes from statement of objective, through evidence, to relevant and justified conclusion.
 

Development

As I say in my guide to giving presentations (http://www.susx.ac.uk/Users/ssfd0/presgood.html), the main body of your essay is concerned with taking the reader from your Introduction to your Conclusion in the most clear, focused, linear, persuasive, and entrancing manner possible. There are too many ways in which this may be done for me to be too prescriptive. Here are some pointers instead.

The most important sentences in the development stage of essays tend to be either the first or last ones in each paragraph. My preference is for first lines. I like to try and do two things with opening lines to paragraphs. First, I like them to make the main 'point' of that paragraph, with the rest of the paragraph explaining, elaborating, qualifying, and justifying that main point. Secondly, I like the first sentence of each paragraph to 'link' the preceding and following paragraphs. This latter point means that I could (and often do) form a 'skeleton' of the essay just by reading the first line of each paragraph. Doing so should tell me about most of the content of the essay as well as demonstrate the linear development of the essay that persuasively moves the reader from Introduction to Conclusion. Some authors prefer to do similar things with the final line of each paragraph instead of the opening ones. Really good authors use both sentences to perform different roles, e.g. opening ones to make a main point linked from all that's gone before and closing ones to draw a conclusion from the material in that paragraph and provide a link to the next. Do what works for you, but always concern yourself with relevance, justification, and direction/structure.

The hardest advice to give in this guide concerns exposition. The appropriate form and proportion of exposition in an essay varies considerably across years of study (among other things). At the start of your degree you are likely to be expected to report a few studies or theories in some detail. By the end of your degree you should be able to let the reader know that you have read 'enough' of the relevant literature and refer to particular findings and procedures (or whatever) only when to do so serves an analytic purpose, i.e. is necessary for your argument. Describing classic studies and theories in detail is neither necessary nor appropriate in the final year of a degree: tutors know such material and they EXPECT students to. Early education is about learning material and analytic tools. Later education is about using those materials and tools to actually analyse. Thus, the best exposition serves the purpose of justifying or providing an argument. Exposition for its own sake, no matter how good, is rarely appropriate for undergraduates. Your undergraduate career (and any subsequent academic development) should be essentially a process of altering the exposition/criticism ratio of your communications in favour of the latter term.
 

The Conclusion

The following is lifted straight from my presentation guide (http://www.susx.ac.uk/Users/ssfd0/presgood.html), with a single sentence added.
The Conclusion has several components. The first, but not the only one, is to summarise and/or synthesise the main points made and/or conclusions reached in the main body of your presentation (i.e. during the Development), possibly with an accompanying summary of the main reasons for (i.e. justification of) those points/conclusions.

Another important function of the Conclusion is to explore the importance and/or relevance of the points made/conclusions reached for the theories (etc.) mentioned in the Introduction. For example, do the points support, destroy, or indicate necessary amendments to such theories? Remember what was said above that all good essay titles implicitly or explicitly ask to what extent something is or is not the case.

Thirdly, are there other implications of your conclusions, e.g. for future research, for social policy, or whatever?
Finally, how confident should one be of your conclusions? Are there any qualifications or caveats? Are there any important possible objections to your conclusions and, if so, how might you meet those objections?

Having already carefully listed the potential limitations of and qualifications to your arguments, try to end your essay on an up-beat note. There is a big difference between modesty and careful judgement on the one hand and suggesting to the reader that both they and you have been completely wasting time. Let the reader know why both of you have gained from the production of your essay.
 

The Proof-Read

No matter how good you are, your essay will benefit from being closely proof-read by someone other than yourself before submission. Someone else will usually spot your errors and omissions better than you will. Reward them for finding all typing mistakes, errors of punctuation and grammar, non-sequiturs (look this up if you don't know what it means), overly long sentences, etc. Being defensive (to the point of hostility) will not encourage them to repeat the favour.
 
 

Odds & Ends

Abbreviations

As a rule, avoid them (except in direct quotes). E.g., use "do not" instead of "don't"
 

Apostrophes

Put them in the right place. This is not a matter of pedantry (unlike some tutors' obsession with split infinitives). Apostrophes change meaning. In particular, please grasp the difference between "its" (without the apostrophe, as with other impersonal possessives, such as “his”) and "it's" (with an apostrophe, to indicate the missing letter - although see "Abbreviations" above).
 

Commas

Do not apply randomly. First, make sure your sentences are short enough. Secondly, read every sentence aloud, pausing every time you've used a comma (or full-stop, colon, or semi-colon). If you sound strange, think about changing your punctuation.
First-person versus third-person

If in doubt, use the third-person singlular, i.e., "It may be argued" rather than "I would like to argue".
 

"I think..."

There are three issues here. The first is the rather dull and wholly pointless first-person versus third person debate. The second is that you SHOULD be letting the reader know what you think. Essay-writing is all about demonstrating an aptitude for critical thinking. However, use of the first person is not necessary to do this. The third is that you thinking something is - in itself - persuasively weak. When rude (or just tired) tutors say that they don't care what you think, what they mean is that they want to be persuaded that there are good grounds for thinking as you do. Thus, do reveal what you think, but do this by concluding things on the basis of evidence. "I think..." is very often evidence that the opposite is true.
 

Referencing

Use APA style. See web guides from links on the same page you found this.
 

Rhetorical Questions


As a rule: avoid them. If you must use them, tell the reader what the answer is. (Answers to rhetorical questions are rarely as obvious as writers think.) Then justify your answer, i.e. say why this 'must be' the answer to the rhetorical question. Then make explicit the relevance of the answer for the argument you are developing. In my experience, rhetorical questions are usually reliable indicators of laziness, used in a failed attempt to avoid having to provide a necessary rationale or 'link'.
 

Split infinitives


Life's too short to needlessly worry about these, surely?
 
 

Feedback on particular essays

Introduction

In an ideal world all essays would be returned with detailed comments on each and every aspect of their contents and presentation. 'Aint going to happen. I use an essay feedback form similar to the one described below. It allows me to indicate good points as well as bad. (I usually fail to do the former sufficiently when providing feedback exclusively qualitatively.) It also allows and forces me to give feedback on a range of dimensions. It also allows (and encourages) me to limit my written comments only to the single or few aspects of students' essays where relatively little attention is likely to reap relatively large rewards.
 

Conflicting feedback

Three forms of assessment are currently in vogue. Formative assessment is that which contributes to whatever qualification you are striving for: in your case, an undergraduate degree. Summative assessment allows tutors to ascertain how well they have succeeded in whatever aims they have in teaching you. Diagnostic assessment attempts to identify where improvement is necessary or possible. When assigning grades, tutors often feel a tension between the first and third of these assessment types. Tutors also sometimes allow or want non-assessment pressures to affect their marking, e.g., wanting to reward effort and/or some form of improvement. Another benefit of the essay feedback sheet I use is that it lets me tease apart these competing pressures to some extent. The implication of this for you is that there may appear to be inconsistencies in the various components of the feedback sheet. Broadly speaking, everything indicated before the "overall grade" is an attempt to provide diagnostic feedback; the "overall grade" is determined by summative feedback requirements (usually indicated by assessment criteria for your course - see below for more details on this); and comments after the "overall grade" is often an indication of how well you are doing on the course in rather more general and contextual ways. You should treat these three sections of your feedback form as potentially independent.
 

Using feedback sheets

Ideally, you will use feedback sheets at least twice. Before you submit a ‘complete’ essay you should mark it yourself (and/or get a friend to do so) using the same feedback sheet the marker will use. This should go some way to telling you the strengths and weaknesses of the essay and will enable you to exploit this knowledge via revision should you choose to do so. When you get your essay back, close study of the feedback sheet will tell you what the marker thought the strengths and weaknesses of your essay were. Clearly, for future assignments you want to try and capitalise on the former and remedy the latter.
Tom Farsides
Social Psychology Group
University of Sussex
Monday, 14 May 2001

Tom's Essay Feedback Sheet

University of Sussex (Summer 2001)
2nd Year Course: Group Processes
Essay feedback sheet from Dr. Tom Farsides

STUDENT............................................................      TOPIC.........................................................
Note:  Words and phrases underlined or circled below are particularly note-worthy: in red if considerable improvement possible, in black or blue if done well.

                                                                                                                                                 Additional
                                                     Excellent   Good   Adequate   Poor      Bad                             Comments
1. Focus on topic                           (     )        (     )       (     )       (     )     (     )
Question answered. Relevant material used. Essential issues covered.
NOT: off the subject, missing the point.

                                                     Excellent   Good   Adequate    Poor      Bad
2. Reading/understanding             (     )        (     )       (     )       (     )     (     )
Breadth and depth of study. Overall understanding of issues
NOT: poorly researched, thin, confused, inaccurate

                                                     Excellent   Good   Adequate    Poor      Bad
3. Analysis                                      (     )        (     )       (     )       (     )     (     )
Critical reflection. Depth of analysis.
NOT: superficial, mechanical

                                                     Excellent   Good   Adequate    Poor      Bad
4. Structure                                     (     )        (     )       (     )       (     )     (     )
Ordering of ideas and arguments. Distinct points in paragraphs. Linkages between sections.
NOT: disorganised, lacking a coherent thread, no introduction or conclusion.

                                                     Excellent   Good   Adequate    Poor      Bad
5. Use of evidence                          (     )        (     )       (     )       (     )     (     )
Consistent reference to evidence for claims. Appropriate detail. Balance.
NOT: unsubstantiated assertion, weak argument, waffle

                                                     Excellent   Good   Adequate    Poor      Bad
6. Style and presentation               (     )        (     )       (     )       (     )     (     )
Clear, concise, lively. Appropriate use of references and quotations. Proper Bibliography.
NOT: dull, difficult to read, ungrammatical, poorly spelt



                                                     Excellent   Good   Adequate    Poor      Bad
7. OVERALL                                 (     )        (     )       (     )       (     )     (     )                Provisional %
 



Please note: Percentage mark is provisional and subject to ratification by the relevant Examination Boards. Evidence relating to late or non-submission of assessed coursework should be submitted to the Undergraduate Exam Office in Sussex House by the set deadline.

Main improvement that could be made to this essay:
 
 

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